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Edits and Out-takes

October 12, 2012

Tani's flower  In response to comments from a reader who wanted to know more about Chen’s story in Zipangu, I am posting below a passage that was edited out of the novella in order to reduce the cast of characters. I did consider putting edits at the end of my Smashwords story in the same way as film-makers include out-takes on DVDs but decided to use the back matter to showcase the start of the next book, The Encircling Isles..

This scene is part of a whole chapter edited from the final version. It takes place just before New Year, the time when Chen was presented to the community. Those of you who have downloaded the story will know that he has been befriended by Danno. Danno is Tani’s uncle. Prior to New Year, when the temple is opened to the villagers, Danno had approached Tani about making a kimono for Chen to wear. His own clothes had been hidden to conceal his true identity shortly after the monks took him in…

Danno described the visitor as being about Akemi Roshi’s height and build but omitted to mention the strong resemblance. Tani wondered who the visitor really was and where he had come from.

     She spread out the three kimonos that her uncle had given her. They smelled of the cedar chests where they had been kept since Makato Roshi’s death. She walked round the garments to assess how best to take them apart, concerned that the material would still be imbued with the soul of the original wearer.

     By the light of a firefly lantern, she detached the neckbands and set them to one side before unpicking the sleeves and selveges. Once all the material was laid flat on the floor, she selected two straight lengths to make up the body, joined the pieces together up the middle of the back and left them open over the shoulders at the front.

     Reciting ancient chants for protection, Tani sewed two half-width okumi sections on to each side of the garment to make an overlap before stitching the sleeves onto the main body. To complete the robe, she folded a strip of cloth into an eri to form a neck-band reaching about a third of the way down each side. She tacked this to the front opening around the neckline.

     Working late at night to a background of insect song, she didn’t notice the subtle difference in shade between the eri and the main garment…

As you can imagine, Tani became enamoured of Chen and she had a significant part to play in the rescue of the villagers during the second tsunami.

I now have more edits to make to the e-version. Smashwords have informed me that two bookmarks are causing problems with some formats and I need to remove them. Those formats which are available for download at the moment do not seem to have this problem. The world of technology still holds many mysteries for me but I am determined to make the necessary adjustments for this story to be available in the Premium Catalogue.

Zipangu, Year of the Dog 1274: The Second Wave is free to download to your p.c., e-reader, I-pad etc. until end 2012 from www.smashwords.com

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